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-This page contains all of the feedback received regarding the GNU
-Social contract. Each piece of feedback will be reviewed and
-evaluated for inclusion. The feedback is included here anonymized
-without any personally identifying information.
+# Feedback on DRAFT GNU Social Contract 1.0
 
-# (a) Name of the document
+This page contains all of the feedback received regarding the GNU Social
+Contract (GSC) following its announcement on 28 January 2020.  On 10
+February 2020, the GSC drafting working group met to collect the
+feedback and address concrete points.  The group was composed of:
+
+  * Andreas Enge
+  * Andy Wingo
+  * Carlos O'Donell
+  * Ludovic Courtès
+  * Mark Weilaard
+
+The feedback is included here, stripped of personally identifying
+information, as well as the corresponding resolutions and GSC text
+changes.  Note that some of the feedback is verbatim.
+
+## (a) Name of the document
 
 > Please don't call the document a Social Contract.  The first sentence says:
 > "These are the core commitments of the GNU Project...".  In other words:
@@ -14,7 +26,7 @@ without any personally identifying information.
 >
 >   The GNU Promises
 
-## Resolution
+### Resolution
 
 We sympathise and this was a point of discussion among the GSC drafting
 working group, but it is the option that got the most support.  We hope
@@ -22,39 +34,41 @@ that those GNU participants that prefer another name can look beyond the
 title to the content. The term Social Contract is also commonly used by
 other Free Software projects to describe their core values and mission.
 
-# (b) Pledge to whom?
+## (b) Pledge to whom?
 
-Original: "These are the core commitments of the GNU Project to the
-broader free software community. "
+The original text included the sentence, "These are the core commitments
+of the GNU Project to the broader free software community," to which
+there was the following feedback:
 
 > The first sentence continues with: "to the broader free software community".
 > Well, why only to the free-software people?  I would say: "to the world".
 
-## Resolution
+### Resolution
 
 Good point.  We have updated the wording to 'These are the core
 commitments of the GNU Project, which creates and distributes a software
 system that respects users' freedoms.'
 
-# (c) GNU software
+## (c) GNU software
 
 > The second sentence says: "The GNU Project provides a software system..."
 > The word "system" is both too vague and too all-encompassing; it sounds as
 > if it wants to be a single, massive block of software.  I would say that
 > the GNU project "provides software packages...".
 
-## Resolution
+### Resolution
 
 Thank you for the feedback.  The new wording is "The GNU Project creates
-and distributes a software system that respect users' freedoms", which
-keeps "system" in place as an aspirational statement
+and distributes a software system that respect users' freedoms".  Note
+that we have decided to keep "system" in place as an aspirational
+statement.
 
-# (d) GNU and the broader free software community
+## (d) GNU and the broader free software community
 
-Original text: "Free software extends beyond the GNU Project, which
-works with companion free software projects that develop key components
-of the GNU System.  The GNU Project aims to extend the reach of free
-software to new fields."
+With rgards to the original text: "Free software extends beyond the GNU
+Project, which works with companion free software projects that develop
+key components of the GNU System.  The GNU Project aims to extend the
+reach of free software to new fields."
 
 > The third section begins: "Free software extends beyond the GNU Project..."
 > Huh?  Vague.  Does this want to say that there is also free software that
@@ -71,15 +85,15 @@ software to new fields."
 > new fields."  Huh?  What new "fields"?  Again: what is the promise here?
 > Is it that we intend to assimilate everything?
 
-## Resolution
+### Resolution
 
-These are good points.  After much discussion, the revised text is
-now:"The GNU Project works together with other free software projects to
+These are good points.  After much discussion, the revised text is now:
+"The GNU Project works together with other free software projects to
 advance its goals, and aims to extend the reach of the project beyond
 the GNU System."  Again, as this document states goals, we keep an
 aspirational component.
 
-# (e) On GNU welcoming contributions from everyone
+## (e) On GNU welcoming contributions from everyone
 
 > The fourth section says: "The GNU Project wants to give everyone the
 > opportunity of contributing to its efforts..."  To me this sounds as if
@@ -90,8 +104,9 @@ aspirational component.
 > make the GNU project quite unwelcoming to possible contributors.  So,
 > in my opinion, that sentence is rather untruthful.
 
-Some concerns about the “level of experience”; proposed rewording
-(replacing “It welcomes […]” by “It [gives] everyone the opportunity”):
+The feedback also included some concerns about the “level of experience”
+and proposed rewording (replacing “It welcomes […]” by “It [gives]
+everyone the opportunity”):
 
 > The GNU Project commits to providing a harassment-free experience for
 > all contributors.  It wants to give everyone the opportunity of
@@ -108,20 +123,24 @@ Related comment:
 > harassment-free experience for all contributors. It wants to
 > give..."
 
-## Resolution
+### Resolution
 
-We agree that the "welcoming" point should lead with the main message.
-The intention is certainly not that all contributions must be accepted,
-but rather that GNU should take steps to make sure that no one should
-feel unwelcome in GNU based on personal characteristics such as gender.
-The new text is: 'The GNU Project commits to providing a harassment-free
+We agree that this point should lead with the main message.  The
+intention is certainly not that all contributions must be accepted, but
+rather that GNU should take steps to make sure that no one should feel
+unwelcome in GNU based on personal characteristics such as gender.  The
+new text is: 'The GNU Project commits to providing a harassment-free
 experience for all contributors.  It wants to give everyone the
 opportunity of contributing to its efforts on any of the many tasks that
 require work.  It welcomes all contributors, regardless of their gender,
 ethnicity, sexual orientation, level of experience, or any other
 personal characteristics.'
 
-# (f) External threats
+## (f) External threats
+
+With regards to the original text, "Besides upholding the Four Essential
+Freedoms, the GNU Project pays attention and responds to new threats to
+users' freedom as they arise," there is the following feedback:
 
 > > > the GNU Project pays attention and responds to
 > > 
@@ -133,17 +152,13 @@ personal characteristics.'
 > > 
 > > or "monitors and responds to"
 
-Original text: "Besides upholding the Four Essential Freedoms, the GNU
-Project pays attention and responds to new threats to users' freedom as
-they arise."
-
-## Resolution
+### Resolution
 
 The new text is "Besides upholding the Four Essential Freedoms, the GNU
 Project pays attention to new threats to users' freedom, and responds to
 them as they arise."
 
-# (g) GSC signature required for contribution?
+## (g) GSC signature required for contribution?
 
 > > Just to clarify here, do you mean to say that you do not
 > > want to make endorsement of the GNU Social Contract a
@@ -161,35 +176,34 @@ them as they arise."
 >   or oversight enacted and there is no requirement that
 >   any contributor should adhere to it.  Motivations
 >   for contribution are left entirely up to the individual.
-> 
 
-## Resolution
+### Resolution
 
 We do not intend to make endorsing the document a condition for
 contribution to any package.  The GSC simply defines the core values of
 the GNU Project.  For brevity, we are choosing not to add a
 clarification to the document.
 
-# (h) Implications regarding non-GNU activity
+## (h) Implications regarding non-GNU activity
 
 > Does adhering to this "social contract" mean that as a GNU developer
 > I should not work at <state sponsored spying agency>, <proprietary
 > company> or <privacy violating entity>.
 
-## Resolution
+### Resolution
 
 While we certainly do not think that you should violate anyone's
 privacy, the document simply describes what we do in GNU and when
 representing GNU and does not have any broader scope.
 
-# (i) A general meta-question regarding why the document is needed
+## (i) A general meta-question regarding why the document is needed
 
 > The tone and content of the draft contract are not changed from
 > existing practice. But give a better explanation of why a
 > restatement of the GNU project's goals and standards is needed, and
 > where it differs from the goals/standards in previous years.
 
-## Resolution
+### Resolution
 
 The goals and principles of the GNU Project should stand on their own
 and provide volunteers with a key document they can use to decide what
@@ -202,13 +216,13 @@ short document that summarizes our core commitments, with the goal of
 building a shared understanding of our mission as part of the GNU
 Project.
 
-# (j) Welcoming all contributions even from those who don't endorse
+## (j) Welcoming all contributions even from those who don't endorse
 
 - Endorsement of the GNU Social Contract should not be a requirement
   for contributing to GNU. Explicitly adding this under "welcomes
   contributions from all and everyone" would be helpful.
 
-## Resolution
+### Resolution
 
 Accepted in point (g).